bangxbang
Gryphon/Sphinx
That is one freakish bird.
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Post by bangxbang on Jan 1, 2006 0:32:51 GMT -5
Now, I'm not completely done with this as of yet, but I will ask how I am doing so far on it by posting the first paragraph of the prologue in the next post.
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bangxbang
Gryphon/Sphinx
That is one freakish bird.
Posts: 24
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Post by bangxbang on Jan 1, 2006 0:33:48 GMT -5
Chaos. Quietly, lithely it creeps into the heart of the kingdom, affecting everything and everyone in a subtle whisper. Not many were aware of this chaos, but rumors spread of a looming danger from the west. Secrets of war and battle lightened the hearts of young men and sorrowed the hearts of widows and wives. Many will step up to fight this oncoming war, but the chances are poor. The king lay on his deathbed, with only a few weeks left under his belt. His heir was far too young, at about only the age of six. But his mother would aid him in ruling until he came of a more fit age. Now the kingdom waits for the battle to come. Mercinaries and soldiers walked the streets often; saying farewell to family and friends, stocking up on equipment, and enjoying what may be their last cup of ale. Here in Ashmer do we begin, in a small tavern called The Gishemeer’s Bow.
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Post by Dracontiar on Jan 1, 2006 1:27:07 GMT -5
Oooh! That is very nice! I acn't wait to hear the rest of it! i have only one constructive comment; it seems a little vague. THen again this, is only the first little bit of it. Just keep that in mind.
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Post by Aubry The Odd O.o on Jan 2, 2006 1:25:19 GMT -5
Very nice,
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bangxbang
Gryphon/Sphinx
That is one freakish bird.
Posts: 24
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Post by bangxbang on Jan 2, 2006 21:15:39 GMT -5
Thank you. ^^ I've done a few changes to it since, but nothing extraordinary.
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